[sep 17, 2020] Ielts writing #0

New technologies present children with nwe possibilities and potential dangers.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of technology on children in today's society. 

 

답안+이유+지식,경험에 근거한 관련 예시 

 

입장

새로운 기술이 정보에 접근하는 것을 쉽게 만든 것은 사실이지만, 아이들의 소통 능력에는 부정적으로 영향을 미친다.

본론 - 개요

본론 1

교육 정보의 증대된 가용성 - 과거와 달리, 전자책이 학슴 더 쉽게 만듦 - 과제물 온라인 주고받/ 피드백 디지털 형태

본론2 

소통능력에 부정적 - 말로하는 의사소통 덜 하게 만듦 - 사이버 공간과 소셜 네트워킹 사이트들 더 자주 이용

 

서론

Some people believe that new technologies allow children to learn new information more efficiently. 

Others, however, assert that technologies discourage face-to-face interaction and harm children's development.

When discussing the positive and negative sides of this issue, it is necessary to consider factors such as information

availability and children's communication skills.

 

본론1

One positive effect of technology is the increased avalilability of educational information for children.

In particular, there are traditional sources like books and digital sources like e-books.

Unlike in the past, these various resources make learning simpler by allowing students to access information easily.

For example, many elementary school students these days can receive all their assignment online, and even the teacher's feedback can be delivered in a digital format. It is clear that technology has improved the learning experience of young children, so technology has positive effects on them in this way.

 

본론2

However, the development of many new technological gadgets negatively affects children's communication skills because new forms of digital communication have made verbal communication less common. For example, children are more and more inclined to interact with each other by using devices such as computers that can access social networking sites like Facebook and Twitter. As a result, face-to-face interaction has drastically decreased, leading a decline in children's communication skills.

This is problematic because children need to socialize with their peers in order to mature into responsible adults.

Therefore, the use of communication technology could prevent some children from developing properly.

 

결론

To sum up, new technologies certainly proviede advantages such as newer and faster ways of getting information. 

However, as the discussion about technology's positive and negative effects on children has shown, more research should be done to reduce the negative influence of technology on children's development.